Nogi's reviews

Wonderwall

This fan fiction about the One Tree Hill characters Peyton, Lucas and Brooke works well together. The storyline is set in the hospital, a setting that is dark and dull and has the reader wondering what is going to happen. In the opening sentence the author uses the second person narrative to describe how Lucas was feeling ...'he was dying on the inside, but he pushed past it.' This metaphor can contrast the setting of the story as well as the plot, which is 'At the Hospital after the shooting'. The outcome of the shooting was two people died in the shooting and the use of this metaphor to describe the emotion Lucas felt is a clever way of weaving the characters and the storyline together. The reader gets pulled in by the opening paragraph where there is a lot of emotions being described by the author with fullstops in between them. This gives the reader an opportunity to think about what is happening and to feel what the author was feeling when he/she wrote this. The last line of the first paragraph really gives an insight into Lucas' feelings for Peyton. The quote 'she couldn't be dead' shows that he felt a strong connection towards Peyton even though he was with Brooke. This leads the reader to assume was there something going on between Lucas and Peyton during the shooting?

The description of the hallways of the hospital is cold and busy. It's a hospital that is bustling with people and doctors trying to save lives and medical terms becoming like an echo through his ears. This contrast of when he walks through the hallways to when he finds Peyton works well as he describes Peyton with such affection and admiration. 'Her tears mesmerizing him' is quite an affectionate way to describe a person that is supposedly your 'friend'. The hand squeezing between them also show that there may be more going on between them than just friendship.

This fan-fiction gives subtle hints about the relationship between Peyton and Lucas and I can't help but wonder if they are going to get together. Going by what the last paragraph shows, maybe Lucas isn't really in the relationship with Brooke as he closes his phone without replying to her text message.


Glee - Falling slowly

This fan fiction is a awkward encounter between Rachel, Finn and her cousin Alison. The awkward moments between the dialogue of Rachel and Finn show a lot about the status of their relationship. The opening of the first dialogue is uncomfortable between the two which is shown with the awkward Hi's from both Rachel and Finn. This is then furthered with a small conversation about their second part of the summer which ultimately leads to a confrontation about why Rachel didn't reply to Finns messages. The author has really written the relationship between these two characters very well. However Rachel's cousin Alison suddenly appears and it seems as if Finn is admired by the mysterious girl who is described as 'blue-green eyed' who had dimples. It is funny how the author has not yet introduced who the mysterious girl is to Finn, and it is clear to see that he is taken by who she is, as it clearly shows to the reader that she is a splitting image of Rachel. When they are finally introduced and Finn is walking her to Miss Sylvester's office is clear to see that he recognized exactly the same qualities Rachel had in her cousin, so it begs to wonder has Finn moved on from Rachel? or is he holding onto the idea of her with the qualities and the physical features her cousin has to offer? The last sentence shows that he might be moving on from Rachel as he 'smiled and went to class, Maybe this year will be good'. The idea poses a lot of speculation about what he will do, but most of all with whom?

Greek- In love with a girl
This fan fiction was an awesome read. It was set out in a way that was easy to follow. I will say that the author has done an outstanding job of keeping the flow of the story into the dialogues between the different characters. In the first few paragraphs the author has portrayed the storyline in the present and slowly leading the story into the past. The beginning of this story is describing Cappie's feelings towards Casey, supposedly is his 'dream girl'. He is mesmerized by her beauty and can't seem to take his eyes off her. Cappie's desire to be with Casey has always been a secret as he is best friends with Evan, who is currently dating Casey. The author soon takes the reader back into the past back to the days where they spent in college. The author takes us along Cappie's journey, and how he so longed to ask Casey out. But he remained faithful to his best friend knowing that any movement on his ex will ruin their friendship. This shows alot of loyalty on Cappie's part. He was willing to give up his desire of being with Casey in order to remain true to his friend, what kind of friend will do that?

The remaining dialogue is back to the birthday party where Cappie is shattered to find out that Evan is going to propose to Casey. I like the way the author has purposely taken us through Cappie's journey to show us the heartbreak he faced in the past, and the heartbreak he was enduring in the present. The sign of loyalty from Cappie is heartbreaking to read as he has to witness a love that he is never going to have. The last sentence sums it up...'but how was he supposed to watch his friend propose to the girl of his dreams? Begrudgingly Cappie made his way back to the party and got ready to have his heart broken for a third time.'

Privileged-Egyptian rivers

In this fan fiction I was quite confused by when I first started reading, The entry into the story was vague and did not really tell a story. When i read further into the story I realized that it was in first person narrative, and the author was going through the emotions of Megan's character. This was not really well written as the author kept going in and out of thoughts which weren't complete so the storyline was either lost or difficult to understand. The thoughts about Megan's romances between Will and Charlie are engaging. The author uses a lot of metaphors to describe the kind of guy each person is. She describes Will as the rich, successful dream guy that any girl would want, and then on the other hand she describes her best friend as her river of Egypt. She is confused by her feelings between the two, and is torn between love and lust. The love that she has for her best friend since childhood Charlie and her idea of being with a successful rich guy like Will. The author quotes "...Because I love him and he is like the waves that ripple through my huge river. Always moving, never ending, never stopping – but neither ever for me to catch. They have to return to the shore for that to be a possibility.' The power of this quote in this fan-fiction makes this story like a reality. It's like living in the moment and to expect the unexpected. Best friend= Love or Dream guy= Lust.

Shortland street- PostMortem

This fan fiction is written really well. It takes us on Sophies journey through the hurt and pain that she had endured after the death of Kieran. The author describes in one paragraph all the bad things Sophie had to endure whilst with Kieran, contrasting this with the good qualities portrayed by Daniel. This is a really good contrast between the two personalities of these characters and gives the reader the sense of good and evil. The dialogue after these descriptions is a great flow between Sophie and Daniel. The author has done a good job in placing Sophie's thoughts into the dialogue which helps make Sophie's character more vulnerable and the sense that something is going to happen between her and Daniel. She initially wants to be with Daniel however being the genuine guy he is he doesn't want to take advantage of her vulerability which shows a sensitivity that Kieran did not possess.

I like how the author has showed a connection between Sophie and Daniel, as it assures the reader that Sophie is going to be able to move on with a guy that she deserves, and like the last sentence reads; "...for reminding me that life does go on, post-mortem'. This is a clever way of interlinking the title of the fan-fiction into the story.

The Vampre diaries- Camping with Damon

This fan-fiction is from the tv program Vampire Diaries. The characters of Stefan, Elena and Damon are a great combination, especially when they are both in love wiht Elena. This fan-fic gives the love connection between Elena and Damon. From the get-go it is clear too see that there is a mutual attraction between them and even though Elena is 'dreading' the camping experience wiht Damon the way the author has described her thought says otherwise. 'It was hard to admit, but Damon looked really, well...attractive' is how the author descrribes Elena's feelings. The use of the first person narrative is a good way of showing how Elena's character felt and the different emotions she was experiencing with Damon. I feel that through this fan-fiction Elena and Damon have a feeling that something might happen between them on the three weeks they're on the camping trip together, something that might change their lives forver. This is only a opinion and might not happen, however I feel that there is the conection that should be furthered between them as this would really make this fan-fiction more enjoyable to read.

The Vampire diaries- Extended Vacation

This fan-fiction is driven by a sense of protection. A protection for Elena that two brothers would do in order for nothing to happen to her. This fan-fiction is a first person narrative between Damon and Stefan Salvatore. They are both doing everyhting in their power in order to protect Elena from the vampire that is trying to kill her. The reader is led through the discussion between Damon and Stefan about the best way to protect her. We are shown that Damon would do anything in order to protect Elena and Stefan uses this to his advantage knowing that his brother couldn't resist protecting the woman he loves, The author is quite clever to place Elena in Damon'd protection knowing full well of the circumstances that arise between the two. The question worth considering is how will Elena feel knowing that the brother she loves will not be protecting her, but it is the brother who is secretly in love with her that willbe shielding her from harm?