Saturday, April 2, 2011

Friendship by Younju

Author's note: This fan fiction is based on a Japanese anime called Durarara. Particularly on the friendship between Mikado, Masaomi.



Disclaimer: I don't own anything but the story's plot.






Friendship





“I’ll see you guys tomorrow then!”


“Bye Bye.”


“Goodbye…”



The three students in blue school uniforms separated after a farewell to each other. The sunset was covering the town of Ikebukuro with its yellow streams of light. After the farewell, Mikado, one of the three students, slowly made his way home by crossing the traffic. He sighed for once before crossing the road. The movement of his legs were somehow exhausted.



While walking, he thought of his friends who he just said goodbye. Masaomi, the brightest one out of them was noisy as always. Mikado tried to persuade him again from going out to Ikebukuro Park to search for some girls to date with. When Mikado first saw Masaomi doing that, he didn’t have a clue how to stop him, but now, after 6 months of attending the same school as him, Mikado was surely used to it. It was like an everyday life and this made him realize how frightening familiarity could be.



Anri, the only girl was the one who Mikado secretly fell in love. Even though Mikado thinks that it is ‘secret’, everyone in Raira High School seemed to know about their ‘secret love’. And it is only Mikado and Anri themselves didn’t realize about their awkward relationship.



The main Sunshine road of Ikebukuro was busy and filled up with people especially during the afternoon. As dodging the crowd and making his way, Mikado thought of the cute smile Anri made when Mikado and Masaomi were talking about their childhood. The two boys knew each other when they were very young, and because Anri is a new member of their ‘circle’, she seemed to enjoy listening to Mikado and Masaomi’s past and childhood episodes.



Mikado was sure that he felt happy when Anri smiled. Yes. That was for sure. But along with the happiness, he felt a hint of jealousy blazing up at the corner of his heart. At first, he couldn’t discover the reason why, and how he had the kind of feeling, but…



“Masaomi…”



Now he understood.




He legs stopped. He couldn’t move it as if he got paralyzed by something. People who were walking behind him bumped into him shouting rude words at him, but he couldn’t hear them. They even said it straight at his face walking past but he was unable to hear their voices. Inside of him, there was a tornado of percussion and agony. He did not know what to do so he came up with a decision not to do anything.



Mikado has no idea how Masaomi and Anri could be thinking about each other. The feeling that they felt when Mikado wasn’t around. He was sure that Masaomi is currently attracted to her because he asked her out officially when three of them were on the way home together. Although he said it in a tone in just for joking around, and there were no seriousness in him, no one knows the truth of what Masaomi really thinks about her.



The most fact that Mikado is concerned about is Anri’s feelings towards Masaomi. Anri is a kind of girl who does not express her thoughts to anyone. She seemed to have no experience of loving another person, but the only moment she smiles and expresses her happiness is when Mikado and Masaomi are around.



But that fact was what Mikado was most concerned about.



Not knowing what Anri is thinking towards Masaomi, but neither Mikado himself. That was the most painful agony.




“…”



He stood there not moving an inch looking down at his feet. It was like an enormous amount of information swarming about inside Mikado’s head. He couldn’t admit the possibility of Masaomi and Anri getting together.



But the most thing that he could not admit was Mikado himself thinking about that possibility.




“Oi! What are you doing in the middle of the path?”



When Mikado came up with that conclusion, he was disturbed by someone shouting right in front of him. A familiar voice. A voice which Mikado hear every day now.



“Are you okay? You look a bit pale.”


“Masaomi.” murmured Mikado with a surprised look on his face as he faced the person in front of him.



His very oldest friend who he knew when he was a child.



“I came back looking for you. I don’t like talking serious stuff, but somehow I thought you weren’t feeling well today. I was concerned so I couldn’t go back home. Is something wrong?” explained Masaomi looking at Mikado with a worried face.



Mikado didn’t say anything. For a moment, he closed his eyes and took a deep sigh. He looked up at Masaomi and smiled almost alike to the smile that Anri made before, but more happily.



“Nothing Masaomi. Nothing was wrong except for me.” said Mikado.



Masaomi was curious at first when he saw Mikado’s smile, but he instantly smiled along with him. Somehow, he was relieved that he came back to Mikado.



“Wanna go search for pretty girls in Ikebukuro Park today?” said Masaomi with a delightful laugh.


“Masaomi!” shouted Mikado angrily, but his face looked happy and relieved as well.



The two boys in blue school uniform walked down the crowded Sunshine road in Ikebukuro. The town was starting to get dark but the two of them did not care. Mikado and Masaomi were sure that their friendship will have no end, and even when misery comes to both, the two boys will be there for each other.




3 comments:

  1. Good story Younju. I like the relationship between Masaomi and Mikado. You have highlighted their friendship very well, however at times I didn't really understand the relationship between the two friends and Anri, but I love the complicated emotional relationship Mikado has in his head about Masaomi and Anri. Overall it is a warm-hearted story that has a good laugh.

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  2. I found this story very confusing, I found it very difficult to follow. In this paragraph you have used two different examples of how he lost concentration, 'People who were walking behind him bumped into him shouting rude words at him, but he couldn’t hear them. They even said it straight at his face walking past but he was unable to hear their voices.' I think you could have just used one of the sentences rather than both.

    I didn’t understand the sentence 'But that fact was what Mikado was most concerned about.' I think I know what you are trying to say which might be 'Mikado was most concerned about whether Anri has feelings towards him.' I also noticed a few contradicting statements such as “Masaomi!” shouted Mikado angrily, but his face looked happy and relieved as well. I don’t think you can look happy, angry and relieved all at the same time.

    One other thing I noticed was “...” I'm not sure what that means? I really enjoy anime and I can see direction of your story. I liked your simile 'tornado of percussion and agony.' I just think you need to fix up a few grammatical errors and it could read really well.

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  3. Well-done Younju! This is a very cheeky, fun story. It’s good to be refreshed by an overseas franchise I am not familiar with. The exposure is vital for me, as a student of language, so thanks for helping me explore this world.

    Unfortunately, I think English being your second language, you were let down at times. The story was very difficult to follow. Simple changes, for example changing ‘got’ to ‘was’ in the line ‘He couldn’t move it as if he got paralysed by something’ would help a reader understand the writing.

    There is probably something to be said about using an excess amount of words. At times I feel as though you have added words that seem out of place in the sentences. Go back and double-check your sentence structures.

    I would probably suggest getting rid of your line ‘His very oldest friend who he knew when he was a child.’ It does not belong anywhere in the storyline.

    Regardless of the English grammatical mistakes, I did gather your underlining theme of friendship. The characters experiences throughout the story helped me further understand how important my friends are to me.

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